Top Ten Fanfiction Warriors Mary-Sues

Bad grammar. Obvious writing. Perfect cat. Has Blackstar, Hawkfrost, Graystripe and Firestar as her mate. She is purple with a white star on her forehead. Has eyes that color-change from amber to rainbow. Also, Hollyleaf is never evil. Hollyleaf was actually a kind character in the canon. -Tigerkit from ThunderClan

Well, let's go.

The person doesn't know grammar or spelling. And three cats love her. And, she got asked to be mates with Graystripe and Firestar when she was a apprentice. COME ON! And she never followed Clan rules. For example, cats can't be purple. Or have a star on their head. Or have rainbow eyes. This person must be three years old, and obviously hasn't seen a cat. And just to add on, she has so many strengths. She defeated Blackstar when she was barely a apprentice, and Firestar said she was too 'good' at fighting to learn how to fight off a fox. It was so ' horrible, I skipped many chapters (AKA paragraphs), and something weird happened...

She lives in a Clan called ChocolateClan with a leader called Smilestar. She lives in a camp with a chocolate pond. candy grass and cotton candy dens. There is a food party pile, and she knows how to do the Tango, with a mouse (that's kind of funny...). In her territory, there are Milky Way tree trunks, M&M leaves and candy trees. Basically, her territory is from candy itself. Dovepaw is called by Smilestar to lead the Clan to the Gathering, and Dovepaw TELEPORTS to hunt. She also levitated her caught prey (that were about twenty), a badger comes out of nowhere and kills her, the badger becomes a Kraken, and Dovepaw faints. Dovepaw meets a Twoleg, gets back to life, leads the Clan to the Gathering.

No much more of the story has been published, but we can be sure Dovepaw must be one of the top positions in the list. She doesn't beat Obsidianwing as Obsidianwing has lovers, while Dovepaw has no lovers.

Gross. She and Firestar kiss, Jayfeather and her kiss. She and Icewing kiss. She killed her own, innocent kit, Tigerkit. Blackstar exiles her, she kills black. She and Leopardstar kiss.

This cat is from a not very known story, Obsidianwing's Quest, and almost ties with Gleamstar. Obsidianwing's story starts as Obsidianpaw, and she and Firestar kiss. Jayfeather, Icewing (who is that cat? ) amd Lionblaze also love her. Obsidianwing has a kit, called Tigerpaw, and she kills him because she THOUGHT he was Tigerstar reborn. Poor kit D: She escapes, mates with Blackstar, gets to know Sol (and he changes his name to Sun because he says Spanish is STUPID! THAT'S MY LANGUAGE! ) and goes off to sunset with... LEOPARDSTAR! Then, she goes with Scourge that was somehow revived. She has Blackstar's kit, and Scourge gets her out of BloodClan. Finally, she goes to the Dark Forest with Sol, that somehow died, has three kits with him, and kills herself.

What a crazy life. With all those explanations, you can see how she almost tied Gleamstar from Starkit's Prophecy.

To be honest, when I started reading this, I actually enjoyed it. I mean, the prophecy was obvious, but besides from that, the author wasn't actually bad at writing like others *cough* Xdark.rosesx *cough*. But later on, Cleardawn's personality became more and more bland, and I stopped reading it.

I really, really didn't like this book. It's annoying too, because the author HAD writing skills, but she wasted them on a terrible plot and a terrible character. I will review it:
Cleardawn:
She's the cliche character. Her personality is basically nonexistant. Her family is super cliche: Father who doesn't care about her, dead mother (this part is possibly the only interesting part in the book), nice sister, mean brother. And she had bloody, prophetic dreams. I also hate how she has a mate, but Flamestar also loved her. It annoyed me when he commited suicide when she didn't love him.
Plot:
Mostly boring. The prophecy was extremely obvious and stupid. I hate this book.

-Talonsnow

She sucks like the book started out pretty good, but it kept slowly slowly getter badder because of the character. She is a very bad character, the prophecy was SO obvious, it was like something about the clearest dawn, and BOOM you just exposed her warrior name, and she is the most important cat in the whole book, all it focuses on is HER. And by the way she is very mean, selfish and rude imao

Stupid character, she deserves to die in a hole. that's what she did to her mom, she went all like oh no! what have I done, I killed my mother, I don't care that I killed her, but I care that I will be exiled from my clan so I'm just going to hide her in this hole. that's literally what she did! SHe killed her than hid her in a hole!

First off, they copied Luna from Sailor Moon, which is like the best Anime ever. Second of all, she has an incredibly stupid name. And lastly, I bet she has a prophecy, doesn't she? Where she saves the clans? Where she has power beyond belief? You know what I'm ranting about.

Lunarmoon, the only mary-sue that has a brother that is actually sane. Everyone loves Lunarpaw, she meets with a warrior of DayClan, another Clan, and Wolfpaw, an apprentice of her own Clan, and they both become Lunarpaw's mates. Cometpaw, Lunarpaw's brother, is seen by Lunarpaw kissing with Blueflame, a warrior of their Clan. Lunarpaw blames him and says that 'her relationship is blessed by StarClan'. She believes that she is amazing and perfect, and everyone of her family is perfect and that she should be leader. She has one (I don't know if she has more) power, healing cats. Her brother, Cometblaze, is the only one that doesn't like Lunarmoon and that's why I love him :D

Lunarmoon doesn't win Dovepaw as Dovepaw lives in a candy territory and has more than one power.

Her mentor is the leader. The start of the mary-sueness. She lives in a Clan called BUTTERFLYCLAN, she kills a fox on her first day and Hopestar, ButterflyClan's leader, begins training her to become a leader, even saying that when Hopestar dies Rubypaw will become leader. She also has fire powers, and she has a sane sister that is un-perfect, like all Mary-sues. Also, with her powers, she killed a random BEAR in the forest.

Rubypaw must have a position in this list, as she discovered she had a power when she was only, killed a fox, a bear and she has a prophecy.

Rubypaw is a total mary-sue, she kills a fox with ease and has fire powers that killed a random bear that she didn't even smell. She named one of her kits ABBAKIT (what? ) and hated her sister just because she followed the warrior code (again, what? ). She also becomes evil and enjoys seeing Snowblaze sad, and she kills her mate T. T

Empresskit has a prophecy, that she will get rid of the dumb stuff because she is perfect. She has pink fur with stars and rainbow eyes. She believes she is the best, that her brother, Dumbkit, is dumb and her father is Doctorwho, the med cat. Totally sue-y. Then, Empresspaw becomes a warrior because Moralstar says she is a better leader than
Him, and she becomes Empressglitter. She has kits, an apprentice from MeanClan, Nicepaw, steals one of them.

Empressglitter just... must be in this list, no buts.

Oh my StarClan, this sue's HORRID! Between sickening pink fur and golden spots(or is that her mom? ), being mentored by the leader, and ((having the medicine cat--Docterwho, FYI--as her father, GASP! )) she would simply qualify as textbook Starglaem ripoff Sue, but it soon escalates to a level of insanity that not Darkroses had.

It starts with the most obvious prophecy ever, "Out of the mean stuff, a glittering empress shall get rid of the dumb and mean stuff", or something like that. Then Empressglitter winds up having Brokenstar's kits, who are supposedly named after their pelt colors but are given completely wrong names (like naming a ginger she-kit Whitekit).

However, the madness is eventually ended by Empressglitters brother, Smartstar, with a but of fourth wall breaking added, and a return to sanity after she's dead.

Really, this does not do the Trollfic enough injustice. Go look at for yourself. It is on Fanfiction, under the account Empress Tansy.

I loved this one! I read it till the end, even with the (intentional) bad writing! I actually got involved! I loved Smartstar and shipped him with Niceisactuallyevil since the begining! And I loved when Empressstar was killed and how everything was fixed!

I hated this book. Loved the ending tough, where she was brutally murdered. And I love how the author hated tis character because it was a trollfic

Snakepaw/Snakebite/Snakekit/Snakestarstar... where to begin? Probably the oddest part of this character is how she lets herself be controlled by her emotions and feelings, and she has a perfectly normal name. However, she is a green she-cat with black eyes. She once prayed to have Bramblestar be her mentor, so did Clawkit, and Snakekit and two siblings of her's all got Bramblestar as their mentor, at three moons old. Right after her ceremony, a bear with seven heads, fourteen legs, fourteen arms and a body 10000 times bigger than a normal cat's came into camp. Snakepaw killed it in one swipe. Without training, Snakepaw also managed to catch a giant fish, that flew onto Squirrelflight's head in camp, by swiping her paw into the water. Bramblestar is Snakepaw's fangirl as well, asking her to be his mate in the fifth chapter. Bramblestar decides to make her a warrior, then his deputy right after that. But, before that, they both survived a landslide. Then, Snakepaw is rapped by Crowfeather. The fish she caught ended up killing Squirrelflight, then she learns about her prophecy. Then Snakepaw finally becomes a warrior and convinces Bramblestar to make Clawpaw and Glowpaw warriors too. She also becomes deputy. About three moons later, Snakebite goes out on border patrol to mark the border, but a squirrel runs by. She caught it. Then, thousands of more squirrels followed her back to camp.

Bramblestar the gives up his rank to make Snakebite leader. She earns her nine lives, but meets the gods of something, Luma, Caligo and Umbra. They give her the new Warrior Code and deem her Snakestar. During the next gathering, she changes her name to Starstar which eventually turns into Snakestarstar. Soon, she falls in love with the villain of the story, Redwillow.

Snakestarstar learns her real mother isn't Crystalshine, it's Leafpool, and she is part of a mixed litter. Jayfeather, Bramblestar, [Indecipherable], Blackstar, Redwillow, Firestar, Grasspelt, Crowfeather and... more

First off, she is called Beautifulpaw. She is asked to deliver kits without knowing how, and a cat who knew how told her to do it! She gets her warrior name, Beautifulfur, because she discovers who killed the deputy. After all, it was her stepmother, Perfectpelt, who killed the deputy. She also has rainbow eyes, and all her Clan goes crazy after they get drunk and it rains chocolate. She gets pregnant, knows it by ultrasound... She has kits, Orangejuincekit, Sparklykit, Patchkit, Jetkit and Marblekit.

Beautifulfur has this position for her name, her rainbow colored eyes and her kits' names.

Was this a troll story? I can't think of anything else. Her and her kits are COMPLETE mary-sues. Do they also crap rainbows too?

Does this... THING... get killed by the end of this story? I sure hope so, so every thing can go back to sane.

Hahaaahaha BOi DOES THIs FANFIc LOOK FUNNY. Also, where did you come up with the idea that Peppa Pig transmitts her soul and star heart gets her nine lives? I have a trollfic called "glitterkit's prophecy " and when the main character, glittersparkles, gets her nine lives, she gets a tenth life by stargleam ! She grows wings, rainbow eyes, a unicorn horn, and a BUNCH of new powers including the power to shape shift, to become invisible, to fly, to talk to non cat animals, and the weirdest all, teleportation. And that's not even all of them! She got hundreds of new powers to!

Please, I want a link for this.

This seems interesting...

The story of PeppaPigstar is actually in one story that has multiple different Warriors trollfics in them.

When she is born, she is named Starkit; she is white with a yellow star in her forehead, and has pale green eyes with stars as 'eyeshine'. (Keep in mind that the author of this trollfic wrote that it was based of Starkit's Prophecy. It has no official name, either, because its in a "pack" of trollfics.)

Then their medicine cat, PETALBUTT recieves a prophecy that was so obvious you could tell it means that the character will destroy another "evil" Clan.

Oh, and don't forget she has 3. TOMS. AFTER. HER. (LOVE SQUARE ALERT! Sort of..) And you couldn't have guessed, the were BRAND NEW APPRENTICES, and she was still a LESS-THAN-HALF YEAR OLD KIT.

And then the book just screams, "SHADOWCLAN ATTACK (insert 5 million 1' and!'s here)! " Then a warrior kills a warrior who is much more experienced and prepared then them with ONE ...more

Shinykit can hipnotize cats, and everyone wants her autograph. She has sparkly rainbow fur and purple paws. She ate a Nyan Cat, she belongs to CandyClan, she can be even more sparklier, and can glow as a rainbow. She gets her own Cooking Show and knows how to make Catmint Waffles. Anything else you want to know?

Shinykit is a sue, but since there are not so many trollfics, she will be number 8. I'm being nice here.

They actually made a second one! But then it was deleted. The second one was so much better than the first one.

Winterfrost is not a possible name, this is why my fan made clan Winterclan has an explination for its name, if Winterfrost was an actualy name it would be leaf-barefrost. Winterclan was made my my OC Snowstar who was kicked out of her clan, for an actual reason, became a kittypet, learned some twoleg words then made her clan.

Well, she seems like a Mary-Sue.

I can't believe this isn't a trollfic, 15 kits?!?
(Also, this was a great description, it summed up the story perfectly!) If I was Fireclaw, I would've gone for Featherwisp instead of the overly-dramatic Mary-Sure.

I wrote that, and I hate Crystalpaw. Shiny Prophecies actually is cancelled and I deleted my own account, but I know there are people that liked the story so the end will be told here:

Happly, Brindlepaw and littermates turn in warriors (obviously after Crystalkit, that is named Crystalshine). Pastelpaw is Pastelstripe and turns into Crystalshine's mate. Mossystar is killed by a twoleg and Crystalshine is appointed deputy. After some moons, she kills the leader and turns in a tyrant, creating PerfectClan. Brindlefur is tired to be in silence and speaks up in the garthering, ending exiled, and forms a group of rebells with other cats and dogs who hated Crystalstar. Brindlefur meets a friendly dog named Gold, who ends to be her mate. PerfectClan raids the rebell camp and a insane Crystalstar kills half of Brindlefur's pups. Enraged, she murders Crystalstar and everything goes back to normal.

She is destined to save 'everybody' (maybe even StarClan)... with a prophecy. Rosekit is a ginger and dark pink she-cat (how can you be ginger mixed with dark pink?!?! ) with crimson eyes (Rosekit, nobody has crimson eyes). She will probably become another sue, and maybe get a higher rank in the list.

Rosekit doesn't have much information, because only the allegiances and the prologue have been released. But, as it was announced to be a trollfic, we know she will be perfect.

She has color changing eyes and kits with a kit. She was able to make every Clan except ShadowClan vegitarian. Hopestar's Mom's name is Leaffurnace. After becoming an apprentice she almost instantly became a warrior for killing 5 ShadowClan cats even though she had no training. She had her own personalized den. She was even able to ban the leader. She got 50 million billion gazillion lives.

How is this not in top ten... How?

She can't beat Gleamstar (I mean even the best trollfics can't, Starkit's Prophecy is so bad), but I would still put her on this list.

She is black with rainbow fur and eyes, and Starkit's promised she would become the deputy of the clan, and she DOES, right after becoming a warrior, not a SINGLE apprentice mentored. What isn't Sue about that?

It'a JAZZpaw. She deserves her own spin off series! Also to the latest commenter: she's not black with rainbow, she's red with a black tail and blue eyes. Still very unrealistic but just thought it should be said.
Also nobody put on Glimmerpaw's Shadow?

It's JAZZpaw
sorry, but, people, remember her name. she is a character in a fanfiction that it horribly funny

Warning! Just putting this to see if you all think my cat is a Gary-Lue.
Thunderkit was born with a sister and parents. He is a grey and white cat with yellow eyes. He states to his sister Nightkit if she tries to fit in with the clan, showing he doesn't try. When he became an apprentice, he gave himself a lightning scar over his eye. Of course, all of Thunderclan (His clan) thought he was insane for doing this. Even his own kin were angry. He became a Warrior, and had a battle with Shadowclan. He and other clanmates were running away. His other clanmates were jumping down a waterfall. Thunderscar told her to go with him, but she jumped and drowned. This told him to train much harder than he did before, and was rewared with a leader place.

Yeah he is a Gary Stu. I mean, all of thunderclan KILLS THEMSELVES? Then he becomes leader. If you were trying to make a Gary Stu, good. If you weren't, you actually only need to fix those two parts. Overall, your OC is okay. Also I'm gonna put one up that's my OC so thanks.

Perfectkit is mentored by the leader, while her brother is mentored by a dumb cat, that is called 'Dumbcat'. Also, Perfectkit and her brother becomes apprentices at TWO MOONS. She also belongs in a prophecy: 'Perfect is perfect and will save the Clan'. She is perfect, as her name says, and will probably end as Gleamstar.

Only the prologue and first chapter has been published, so I can't say more. I think she needs to appear somewhere, so I put her in the 9th position.

It's in the name!

This is my own OC. While reading these I realized she is a complete Mary-Sue.
She is a orange tabby with white paws, white pelt, white tip of tail, and white tip of ears. She also has red eyes. When she dies, her eyes turned blue.

At the beginning she sleeps for six straight moons. And becomes a apprentice mentored by the leader. A few moons after she starts training she runs into a shadow clan cat at the border and she defeats him but spares his life. Her sisters are WinterPaw and RubyPaw. When she gets back from attacking the shadow clan cat she becomes a warrior very early

She is called stoneclaw

Then her sister WinterPaw runs away to river clan and becomes WinterTail

Stoneclaw gets a apprentice ( witch is branch stars daughter ) and after redpaw becomes red tail, stoneclaw becomes deputy, the next day branchstar dies and as stoneclaw goes to get her nine lives her friend panther pounce askes to be her mate she accepts. And her other friend get super ...more